Grammar edits are tedious, even for a die-hard grammar Nazi like myself, so I think I will go easy on reporting the same grammar issues such as uneven ellipses spacing, and en-dash/em-dash on all the text I find, and I think I'll focus on one-off typos and other new grammar malfunctions as I find them.

The fifth paragraph which starts "'You seek the Stone,' the man in black..." has a couple of issues:  first, each speaker's dialog should be its own paragraph, so this one paragraph should be two (the old man in black, then the sovereign/protagonist).  Second, the "'Silence,' you snap.'" could perhaps be more poignant, per the 'snap' verb, with an exclamation mark within the quote rather than the comma.