[0.77] Typos

DexCisco

Join Date 11/2002

+12

[0.77] Typos

The XML is likely still very volatile and subject to changes, but I thought I would start the mammoth task of ridding it of typos. I'm not even going to touch sentence structure and the rampant use of commas, but there are some fairly obvious mistakes that need to be fixed.

In general, the use of plurals and plural possessives need some work. Here are some examples:

spiders den/lair - spider's den (singular) or spiders' den (plural)
You interrupted the creatures last meal. - creature's or creatures'
bandit's - fine if there is only one bandit, bandits' if more than one
Merchants Guild - If the merchants own the guild, it should be Merchant's Guild, otherwise it could be OK.
the statues weapon - one statue = statue's weapon

See use of plural possessive nouns: link

Apart from that, here are some specific errors in the CoreGoodieHuts.xml. More to follow.

Canvas Lean-to Champion_Empire2

A canvas lean-yo stretches across a fallen tree limb. Two skinned animals - rabbits? Dogs? Infant wargs? - hang from a nearby branch. And from the other side of the hill comes the sound of footsteps rapidly approaching.

Hut Champion_Empire4

A simple hut of stark, unnaturally white wood stands alone in the center of an immense, lifeless clearing... footsteps lead to the hut's door, and alongside them is a dark-colored smear that may be blood.

Footprints?

The Spider's Lair Lair_AlbinoRockSpider

Found Item There is a single hand in the spiders den. It still wears a golg ring set with small rubies.

Darkling Camp Lair_DarklingWarrior

Found Item The darkling had a small puch of items he had collected, a squirrel tail, teeth and a smooth black stone.

Pavillion Champion_Kingdom3

A pavillon of richly-colored

Pavilion has one "l"

Bhinadmi Fissure Lair_Abeix

A crack in the earth reveals an unfathomably deep hole... a world beneath the one we know, haunted by creatures more horrible and magnificant than anything that wanders on the world's surface.

magnificent?

Lair of the Air Shrills Lair_AirShrill

Here stand the ruins of an ancient temple... the runes long since worn off the explosed pillars and stone

The Demon's Lair Lair_AssassinDemon

Found Item You interrupted the creatures last meal. Blood, bones and flesh are scattered like the toys of a demented child. Most of the victims possesions are destroyed, but you do find one item of value.

Widow Lair Lair_BlackWidow

Spun between two dead oaks in a field of ash, a web with threads as thick as rope holds the dessicated corpse of an unfortunate traveler.

desiccated

Rock Spider's Lair Lair_GiantRockSpider

Found Item Within the spider's caveran you find an item.

Lair of Savages Lair_TrollWarrior

Primitive Campground Lair_Troll

Found Item An enchanted shield is braced clumbsily against a nearby tree. The troll was using it as a target when pitching apple cores.

clumsily

Wilding Camp Lair_WildingWarrior

Found Item The Wilding Warrior had a small collection of bottles of mead. Amoung them you find a potion with a dim glow.

Found Item The Wilding Warrior had a collection of small objects, a knucklebone, some beads and a letter.

Ancient Battlefield Treasure_AncientBattlefield

Found Item Amoungst the debris you find a pair of boots, untouched by the years they have spent here.

Found Item Though most of the remnants of armor and weapons is (SB are) ruined, you do find a pair of chainmail gloves that are still serviceable.

Sun-Bleached Bones Treasure_BeastCarcass

Found Item A prior traveler tanned a section of hide from the beast and used it to craft a pair of gloves. Unfortunatly they didn't live enough to try them out.

Abandoned Caravan Treasure_Caravan

Found Item A green skullcap lies within the wreckage, unnotable except for the faint aura of magic about it.

Is this a word? Unnoticeable? Hardly notable?

Shattered Statue Treasure_CrumbledStatue

Found Item A runed token is inset in the statue, the one who owns the token can command the statue.

New sentence.

Equipment Cache Treasure_EquipmentCache

Found Item A case holds an old spear, a veteran of many battles. Despite it's age and the countless battles it has been used in, it is still a formidable weapon.

its

An ancient graveyard Treasure_Graveyard

Found Item A small enchanted tablet is set upon the gravestones. You don't know who left it here or for what purpose. But you have more need of it than the dead.

Found Item Someone brewed a potion here, using ingrediants both foul and unholy. The remains of the potion still remain.

Abandoned House Treasure_RuinedHouse

Found Item This was once a laborers house and it is full of ruined tools and equipmnet. You are about to give up the search when you find a backpack so light it nearly floats in the air.

Fountain of Morian Treasure_SwampFountain

Found Item Deep within the tangle of vines you find a discarded magcial item.

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Objective ID: 2

SuccessText: ... This wall has the Alchemy spell incribed upon it.

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... the jeweled pommel a spoiled grey

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Objective ID: 0 - Description: Check out the cave.

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Objective ID: 1 - Description:

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... The innkeepers elderly wife has passed away and her body lays on the bar.

Objective ID: 0 - Description: Go to the graveyard.

Choice Text: ...You place the innkeepers wife in one of the open graves and begin to bury her.

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Success Text: ... Searching the creatures body you find a magical item.

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Objective ID: 1 - Description:

Choice Text: .... There are only a few wilding familes still huddled behind fortifications.

Hunting the Garrote - Quest_HuntingTheGarrote
... One of the rough walls of the pit have been torn part,

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Objective ID: 2 - Description:

Choice Text: ... You have entered the creatures home, there is no doubt he will defend it.

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Success Text: The runes fade and dissappear from the surface of the shard. ...

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Objective ID: 0 - Description: Go to the heroes [heroes'] tomb.

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Objective ID: 0 - Description:

Choice Text: Fire explodes out of the dungeon,[. L]looking down into it[,] it looks to be a great furnace, not an ancient catacomb.

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Centuries ago a cave system was blocked off by placing a great capstone over it’s entrance.

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Choice Text: ... For long minutes there is only dakrness and quiet, ...

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Objective ID: 0 - Description: Find the location inscribed on the wall.

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Objective ID: 0 - Description: The slavers were traveling slowly, it shouldn't be too hard to catch them.

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Objective ID: 1 - Description:

Choice Text: The temples [temple's] transept are [is] filled with the statues of ancient heroes

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Objective ID: 3 - Description: Explore the Cavern of Loss

Choice Text: ... After none of his soldiers returned form exploring this cave and tired of executing ...

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Objective ID: 1 - Description:

Choice Text: The wilding warriors are already dead. There are only a few wilding familes still huddled behind fortifications.

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Lord Reliant

Join Date 03/2006

+39

Ouch. The use of possessive versus plural is pretty bad! Thankfully changing the XML should be an easy fix, especially because of the work you've put in identifying problems.

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NaytchSG

Join Date 03/2006

+19

Within the flavor text of the dragon eye quest when you defeat the mercenaries:

"You find them trying to trying to make off.... " a few extra words on the final screen as you claim the eye...

Nice work, Dex! War Trolls FTW!

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I was going to report a bug in 0.86 but it looks like it is covered by this thread. I spot checked some of these and all the ones I checked still existed in 0.86.

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NaytchSG

Join Date 03/2006

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Troll lair reward: A shield is clumbsily (should be clumsily) ...

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Lord Reliant

Join Date 03/2006

+39

Too bad this wasn't fixed in .86. At least the list is still here that probably took DexCisco a long time to compile. Hopefully a Stardockian finds time to fix them in the near future. It's great having lots of flavor text, but having it misspelled really detracts from the game's atomosphere.

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Publius of NV

Join Date 08/2002

+231

Quoting Lord Reliant,

reply 31

It's great having lots of flavor text, but having it misspelled really detracts from the game's atomosphere.

Agree. I love Stardock's products (both games and office) but when I see this many misspellings I think, "Don't these guys have a spellchecker?"

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Publius of NV

Join Date 08/2002

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On starting a new game, you get a window that says:

"There is fertile land nearby which, once in your zone of control, you can build a farm on it by clicking on it."

I would suggest rewording this to:

"There is fertile land nearby, on which, once in your zone of control, you can build a farm by clicking on it."

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They added a bunch more items and quests and such for 0.86, but until they are ready to deal with the mistakes already pointed out, there isn't much point in going over it all again. They are obviously not at the point where that kind of thing really matters. But when they are, I'll be there.

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